I'm now closing in on 45K and the official end of the first part - but really, it's the first half. I have many, many ideas for part two, where the 'action' really gets going and our 'babysitter' takes up residence.
But did you notice the word 'half' in there?
This is pretty much turning into a novel. By the end it'll be a good 200 page story, if we assume standard paperback page sizes. I'd love to tell you that'll be completed next month, or even the month after that, but I don't think it's going to happen. Realistically I can't even guarantee it'll be done this year.
However - despite the fact that I am approaching a perfect point to release Part One as-is, I'm not going to do it. Believe me, I am tempted. I need feedback. I crave it. But I'm scared that if I do that, I'll never finish Part Two. And you want a finished story, right?
In the meantime though, I'll be sharing it with some very select people...
... and maybe they'll share their thoughts.
A real teaser. But I won't complain, just eager to get my hands on some new material. Hopefully it won't be a year till release.
ReplyDeleteZam Wessel
Hi GW
ReplyDeleteI'm a fan of your stories, and I see this is going to be an interesting story.
I like the idea of strong woman and some kink, fetish or nasty, wicked ideas in the story!. It maybe great that 'she' use her sexual power/feminine wile over the main protagonist maybe push, persuade, seduce, manipulate, trick or play his mind so he fallen head over heel with 'her' and 'she' control him completely she know that he is hers and doing anything that 'she' want.
You told us that this story is call "The Babysitter"?
Well I guess its about a pervert, wicked, nasty man that put on a female bodysuit to disguise as a teenage girl, a very naughty teenage girl indeed. And then become the babysitter of ordinary family to take care their children. And our main protagonist is maybe a father or a teenage oldest son of the family that somehow also pervert and discover 'her' secret? If this is your story plot, I may have some ideas to share them with you.
Maybe she could use her feminine wile/ power to show him that how far she can control him and make him obey her while use her "innocent little girl look" at her advantage (the other in the family didn't know her secret and also trust her by her look). Such as some point in the story he argue or resist her command and she feel upset, she can have a little blackmail, revenge by herself. When that day 'she' received phone call from the mother that she will come home early and when 'she' was alone with him 'she' coming on to him and seduce him take him of pants and give him a lap dance and he is turn on and then hike up her skirt, put a side her panties, fuck him and jerk him of until he climax. When 'she' heard the front door open and the mother step in to house 'she' ran to other side of room and say “Eww! what the hell are you doing? Are you some kind of perv!” and then ran to the mother with pretend 'innocent' fear look. The mother then see the sight of him naked with hard on penis stained with cum!. The mother want an explanation and 'she' say “I came to look for some thing to eat and found him in here naked and masturbating while watching TV!”. He try to argue but to every one see him like this he was doom, the mother put hands on her hip and teach him while 'she' staying behind her, he could see an evil smile on 'her' face!, he saw this and think "I will get back with that bastard/bitch!". That night he come to 'her' room with angry and confront with 'her', he was surprise to see that 'she' say 'she' was very sorry “I’m so sorry. I just heard she come in the door and I know we didn’t want to get caught doing what we were doing, and I just panicked, I just didn’t know what to do! It was the only thing I could think of.” He saw the fear and frighten innocent girl, and was definitely buying 'her' charade, so 'she' decided to really see how far 'she' could push the situation. “Let me make it up to you?” and then 'she' let him fuck 'her' again and be submissive as his reward and let he be dominate sometime to keep him under control and he was under her control again.
Another idea maybe in their vacation to the beach after that bad situation, (the mother look at him badly now because of his behavior, she still upset at him) When the mother take a sun bath she request the babysitter to rub lotion all over her body. When 'she' rub lotion on the mother's skin on the back naked 'she' even gave him a sinister smile, lick her lips to taunt him like "You never get a chance Dude!, because she never let you rub it on her skin" And he think "That lucky bastard! he is in female disguised so he get best of both world, he even can get intimate with any women that he like, like get in the women restroom, rub a lotion on their skin and they have no idea there a man rub lotion on her skin!" Or 'she' befriend with some sexy girls on the beach and rub lotion on their skin and gave him that look!.
ReplyDeleteOr the family have a teenage daughter and every one trust 'her'. 'She' keep taunting him about how sexy the daughter look when she was naked. Or they even bath together or sleeping together some night when they are storm and the lighting strike, make a very loud sound, the daughter get frighten and hug 'her' and 'she' console her, she have no idea that the person that she think as a kind babysitter that she think as her older sister, her older sister that she hug was a pervert man in disguise!.
In the end maybe 'she' leave him, leaving his life make him confuse and lonely and he tell us his adventure story about that mysterious, sexy, nasty, naughty girl with secret.
Well, these are my twist ideas, maybe a bit dark, but I like powerful dark story, maybe you can have twisted in the end or the blackmail, betrayed as the story with nasty, wicked babysitter gave us so many ideas and possibility!.
I hope that you will like my ideas.
If you like my ideas, please sent the first part of the story, I am very curious to see was its all about! ^_^
Looking forward to read your great story!
Ekkatet
ekkatet@yahoo.com
Cheer!
Hey Ekkatet - so don't take this the wrong way, but your ideas aren't even close to my story... so I won't be sending you/releasing Part One early. ;)
ReplyDeleteIf I was starting from scratch and needed raw ideas, then you'd be giving me some. As it is, the arc of the story has been set for a couple of years. It's just a question of writing it now.
Sounds to me like you should write something yourself. ;)
This post leaves me feeling remarkably bittersweet. Fantastic to hear you're making such great progress, and yet, so disappointing to hear I'll have to wait a while longer before I get to read any of it. Here's to hoping that Part 2 is written speedily amid an extended flash of inspiration!
ReplyDelete- JF
JF, I figured it's better to be up-front than just go quiet for a remarkably long period of time.
ReplyDeleteCan totally understand your feelings tho'.
Looking forward to reading anything you write when you're happy its ready - always a pleasure :)
ReplyDeleteMiss Circe x